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Twenty miles pass us by and this bus still lacks the oxygen to breathe,
And my lungs would hold on for greater distances if need be, for the
Only meters that matter are the ones I gather each day the Sun will
Shine on our blossoming dreams; can you see what I mean, beautiful?
Oh, as I willingly wipe away the dust from the heart on my sleeve,
I try hard not to look directly into your eyes, but the window reveals
Everything that my shyness cannot; like how the hue of blue radiates
Like an open-sky day with reflections of our future painted with clouds:
Will it be full of the everyday memories I have experienced alone? Oh,
I'd be satisfied with swing-set smiles and endless miles along beaches
As we gaze at the tide and wonder how long we have waited for this...

My lungs became empty when you filled my heart with what it needed...

Daniel Haigh
12/10/08
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A reason...

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:iconumluna:
I don't usually expect this kind of beautiful writing in the teen and young romance category. Beautifully done--and true. Nice work.

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Thank you. We're all refreshed and challenged by your unique point of view.
:iconmeeden:
i've yet to wonder where the dreams fall within as each line holds such a dream, an expression, a truth, whether waiting to be or standing still in silence. wonderful words = a favorite to collect. :butterfly: p.s. your italic words go beyond
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A reason no - only an echo of one's longing.

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A heart at the end of its' tether
Swiftly descending into blame,
Pain lasts only a minute,
Resounds through generations forever;
The aftermath, it spells my name.
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This may just be my newest favorite poem of yours. I love lines 6-8; it's stated very thoughtfully and beautifully. My favorite part of this poem has to be "my lungs became empty". Any not so poetic person could write a clichéd "You took my breath away," or something of the sort, but I love the way you expressed it. I think the only thing one can do is patiently hold their breath and wait for the fated moment that dreams will come true.
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"The first question I ask myself when something doesn't seem to be beautiful is why do I think it's not beautiful. And very shortly you discover that there is no reason." ~John Cage~
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Beautiful piece.

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You may have noticed that I'm not all there myself.

-Cheshire Cat
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I love your imagery, and the honesty of each piece.

<3

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The patterns in the stars spell out your name. <3


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Awe, I am glad you feel that way about my writing! I try to be as honest as possible, and not hold anything back; I am far too shy outside of my literature, so I at least do my best to fill in the blanks of my life through writing, and thus have little to no problem revealing bits of myself through each poem, over time.

Thanks for reading! =)

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Reality is just one dream-walk away...
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NO

Thank you. =)

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The patterns in the stars spell out your name. <3


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