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Love Song by *LordAzrael85:iconLordAzrael85:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


Oh, if I lent my light to the stars, could you then find your way?
With the waves crashing at a romantic pace, tell me: will we
See beauty throughout our infinite resolution, or is this just my delusion?
Could the magic last long enough for me to see nature in your eyes?
I have dreamed of silver rain and mountain panes, but yet I seem
To stay stranded at the peak I have come so far to uphold…
Maybe if I wrote you a love song, the melodies would win your heart;
Oh, and then my lasting lyrics would defy fate and pull it apart…

And then mend our connection into something better and pure…

Daniel Haigh
Started: 07/17/08
Finished: 07/18/08
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Written at like 7:30AM at Tim Horton's (coffee shop) in Port Hawkesbury, NS, right before work; I can even write poetry when I'm insanely tired; go me! Haha.

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=meeden Jul 18, 2008, 5:06:52 PM
of all the little piece you could put together.... this one is breathtaking :butterfly:
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~fxup Jul 22, 2008, 5:08:42 PM
i really love your use of nature references and such...this is stunningly written.

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Maybe someday, YOU
can be the first astronaut on the moon.
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~roxysweetie7 Jul 30, 2008, 11:23:04 AM
With lyrics of yours, a love song couldn't hurt :)

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"The first question I ask myself when something doesn't seem to be beautiful is why do I think it's not beautiful. And very shortly you discover that there is no reason." ~John Cage~
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~Beneath-the-Leaves Aug 11, 2008, 5:13:48 PM
I love the way poems that start with questions automatically have a slightly more innocent feel to them, as if one is beginning to venture into unfamiliar territory.

Anyway.

I love this piece. The only word I can find for it is "brilliant" and I think even that falls a little short.

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The patterns in the stars spell out your name. <3


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*LordAzrael85 Aug 16, 2008, 5:51:00 AM
That's an interesting point! I've never really thought about poems starting with questions being more innocent or softer than others, but now that I think about it, I think that's how I've always felt..

Hmm... You've given me something to ponder about.

Thanks for reading, like always! I'm so glad you were able to enjoy my writing. :hug:

--
Reality is just one dream-walk away...
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